Hi Ana nice work I really like how you really introduce the story by Miss Ashley doing the roll also here are some advice you could use powerful words also you could use paragraphs to make story interesting also you could write about other people having their turns but still your story was quiet amazed. - Lily
Hi Ana nice work I really like how you really introduce the story by Miss Ashley doing the roll also here are some advice you could use powerful words also you could use paragraphs to make story interesting also you could write about other people having their turns but still your story was quiet amazed.
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